Wednesday, May 5, 2021

Weekly Scribblings #68: Where Are You Placed?

Greetings, dear Wordsmiths!

Did you all see Lavender Street, early 60’s by Cheong Lee San (dsnake1) which he posted on Sunday April 11 for our Writers’ Pantry #65? In complimenting him on it, I called it a ‘poem of place’, adding that it was also a poem of time. Yet it is rich in other content too, evoking not only a place and an era, but a particular lifestyle, the boy he once was, the father he had at that time….


So what makes a poem ‘a poem of place’?


One of my Aussie friends once attended a workshop on ‘Poems of Place’ and was very disappointed. She sent me a copy of one of the teacher’s own poems which he had used as an example of the genre, and I agreed it was awful: pretentious and dull. Though it did describe a place in some detail.


‘THIS is a poem of place,’ I replied to her, sending the following. It was from a book I’d just bought which had recently won the Walt Whitman award: Black Aperture by Matt Rasmussen. I was currently in love with that book, and this poem most of all.


Tom Black


pushed me into my locker

right after I found out


my brother had killed himself.

He didn’t know yet.


A few years later,

a winter dusk in the field


behind our high school:

he, too, pushed a cold trigger.


The next night I walked

through snow to where


the northern lights

fell over the dead field.


The sky crackled in blue ash

above the police ribbon


strung around some stakes.

His sprawled imprint


had melted a little.

It looked like his life


had fallen asleep.

On the white plate


my flashlight made

on the snowfield, the blood


flickered. I turned

my light off and cried.


— Matt Rasmussen



You might remember it. I used it in ‘I Wish I’d Written This’ in the old Poets United on June 6 2014.


It’s not about place, is it? Nor time. It’s about grief. It’s about the effect on a boy of a brother’s suicide, and later a schoolmate’s. And yet, how it conjures that place! Somehow we get a whole world from it, a particular community, a certain part of the country (of one specific country) – just as we do in Lee San’s Lavender Street.


It’s just my opinion. Maybe I’m wrong. Maybe poems of place should be just physical description and nothing else? 


One which does that successfully, which I also shared in Poets United back in the day, is Christine Strelan's about her home in the bush (not so very far from where I live) in  this video:

 

 


I guess what defines a poem of place is whatever brings the place to life.


So I’d love you to think about places which are special to you for any reason, and bring them to life for us in whatever way you choose, in poetry or prose. 


As ever:

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15 comments:

  1. This was an easy write for me. Of course there are the usual special places -- childhood home, first married home, and so on, but there's one place on this earth that holds a special place in my heart. Great prompt, Rosemary!

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    1. How intriguing! I'll be right over to have a look.

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  2. Rosemary, I can totally see (and feel) why Rasmussen's piece is a poem of place. Every line takes us there, experiencing the place and time and feelings. Thank you for a provoking prompt.

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  3. I wrote about a place I'd like to get back to...soon.

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    1. Another intriguing comment! I'll be over to check it out.

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  4. I rather like The Lavender titled poem by Cheong Lee san

    Happy Wednesday

    much đź’— love

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    1. I'm glad you do. It would be a shame to have missed it, I think.

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  5. I am still getting the weird Error message when I try to comment at Magaly's site. Don't know why and don't know how to fix it. Is anyone else having a similar problem?

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    1. What does the Error message say?

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    2. I don't have the problem, Bev. I wonder have you tried using a different browser?

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  6. you get a chill reading 'Tom Black'. you can clearly see the field where the boy took his life. and you wonder why.

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  7. Hi Rosemary. Like this prompt! This piece, to which I have linked, is a complete reinterpretation and revision, of a Haibun I wrote a while back.

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    1. Ooh, interesting! I'll be over to see. Glad you liked the prompt.

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